Desrosiers rearranged my poem, Something #1, in the comments ("a cool Robert Creeley-ized variation I made by deleting stuff and mostly ignoring scansion") to that post. So now we have this collaborative piece:
Something #2
sitting on the beach
looking at the sea.
nothing to be seen
the ocean swells,
undulations
underwhelming me
I’m mesmerized:
sky, horizon, sea.
"earth is flat" The sea
aligned with that.
nothing to see.
ocean swells.
I see a splash
out of nowhere
surface of the sea...
sitting on the beach
remembering the splash
the swells
mesmerizing.
nothing left to see
until that splash
ON INTO WINTER
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I had thought to end the autumn season with Kigin’s “shape of the wind”
hokku, but a reader in Japan then sent me a new verse that seemed quite
appropriate...
2 weeks ago

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