Desrosiers rearranged my poem, Something #1, in the comments ("a cool Robert Creeley-ized variation I made by deleting stuff and mostly ignoring scansion") to that post. So now we have this collaborative piece:
Something #2
sitting on the beach
looking at the sea.
nothing to be seen
the ocean swells,
undulations
underwhelming me
I’m mesmerized:
sky, horizon, sea.
"earth is flat" The sea
aligned with that.
nothing to see.
ocean swells.
I see a splash
out of nowhere
surface of the sea...
sitting on the beach
remembering the splash
the swells
mesmerizing.
nothing left to see
until that splash
FROM RHYTHM TO STRESS IN HOKKU
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Most of you already know the notion that hokku is seventeen syllables
arranged in a 5/7/5 pattern is wrong. Many people were taught that in
modern haiku (b...
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